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February 7, 2010

Rocky

Rocky
Rocky (1976)

IMDB rating: 8.00

Plot: The ‘Italian Stallion’, Rocky Balboa, is an aspiring boxer in downtown Philadelphia. His one chance to make a better life for himself is through his boxing and Adrian, a girl who works in the local pet store. Through a publicity stunt, Rocky is set up to fight Apollo Creed, the current heavyweight champion who is already set to win. But Rocky really needs to triumph, against all the odds…

Directors: Avildsen John G.

Actors: Stallone Sylvester,Young Burt,Weathers Carl,Burgess Meredith,David Thayer,Spinell Joe,Gambina Jimmy,Baldwin Bill,Silvani Al,Memmoli George,O’Hanlon George,Carroll Larry,Action,Sport,

said he doesn't see a future with us anymore- crushed.?
MY BF and I are in our late 30’s and have had a rocky road , but with much love. We have been fighting the last few weeks and tonight we talked. He said he is happy, he is happy in our home and he loves me but he is having serious doubts. We had talked about getting engaged this year and he said he no longer wants to be on that timeline, that he now is thinking seriously about kids and he does not want to close that door ( i’m older than him and do not have much time left), he said he does not think I am the one he wants to have kids with and he is questioning if we are right for each other. He said he is very confused and doesn’t want to lose me if im the love of his life, but something is just not right with us he thinks and he just doesnt know but he loves me so much. This has turned my world upside down. It was a very calm conversation, but I am devastated. I don’t know what to do. Has anyone been here? It seems futile to even stay together with him feeling this way. Any advice so I dont go off the deep end. I dont know if I should tell him to leave until he figures it out or what to do.


big time
marshmellow dance | Feb 06, 2010


Hi Kerry,
It seems to me you have answered your own question.
It’s time to change and find someone who wants you for you.
It is going to be harsh, but from what you say, this relationship has lit the blue touch paper and is going to explode.
Good luck pet, I feel for you, but it’s time for a change.
Take care.
Ethan2390 | Feb 06, 2010


I have been down that road myself and I actually have a kick a** shirt from that road trip. I know this is absolutely killing you right now but you will be fine. He just wants you to sit there and wait on him. He wants you to be his comfort zone. My suggestion is to go ahead and try your best to get most of the crying out of the way in front of him. I know easier typed than done. But you are going to have to move on. He doesn’t know what he wants and you do. More than likely he is thinking the grass is greener on the other side and it might seem like it from a distance. Even if he does make it on the other side the first thought in his mind will be "wow" I’ve never seen any grass greener then this. But that will not last long. But as far as yourself, when you hurt don’t let him know too much or he knows he has you and he will not worry about you leaving him. But that is what you sincerely need to do slowly but surely is to leave. You have to pick yourself back up off the floor and treat yourself like you are suppose to be treated. Yes, you will still hurt but not as bad as each day passes, you will still cry, but I promise it gets better each day. That is what I did I lived day by day until I quit hurting he played the joke on himself and he is the one that has to live with it everyday of his life. Not you! Smile! Someone truly loves you somewhere on this crazy planet but don’t go looking for it b/c it will come. P.S. It will really piss him off and hurt his feelings when you still have some emotion but he is expecting a lot of emotion so hold it back somewhat. Be strong! Be thankful for what you do have. Like my mother always told me it could be a lot worse than what it is. GO HAVE FUN! Best of Luck!
Bonnie | Feb 06, 2010

February 5, 2010

Screamers: The Hunting

Screamers: The Hunting
Screamers: The Hunting (2009)

IMDB rating: 4.80

Plot: A group of humans arrive on Sirius 6-B to investigate an SOS signal sent out from the planet, which has been supposedly deserted since the destruction of the man-made weapons known as “screamers.” Once the squad arrives, they find a group of human survivors eking out an existence in an old military outpost, but more important, they discover that the threat of the screamers has become even more insidious, now that they’re able to morph into human form.

i download here this movie Screamers: The Hunting in iPod/iPhone quaity

Directors: Wilson Sheldon

Actors: Henriksen Lance,Bryk Greg,Redman Christopher,Rozon Tim,Lapommeray Dave,Richardson Jody,Amell Stephen,Hopkins Darryl,Lush Steve,Dunn Stephen Patrick,Madol Justin,Action,Horror,Sci-Fi,Thriller,

which is the best movie from the following?
Crank 2 High Voltage [CAM]
Hannah Montana The Movie [TS]
Observe and Report [TS]
The Last Word [DVD]
Never Surrender [DVD]
The Uninvited [DVD]
DragonBall Evolution [TS]
Frost Nixon [DVD]
Fast and Furious 4 [TS]
Little Zizou [pDVD]
The International [R5]
The Haunting In Connecticut [TS]
X-Men Origins Wolverine [WORKPRINT]
Duplicity [TS]
Monsters vs Aliens [TS]
Ong Bak 2 [DVD]
12 Rounds [CAM]
Yes Man [DVD]
DragonQuest [DVD]
Baseline Killer [DVDSCR]
Direct Contact [DVD]
Butterfly Effect Revelation [DVD]
The Last House On The Left [CAM]
Knowing [TS]
The Tribe [DVD]
Killshot [DVD]
Bride Wars [R5]
The Beach (2000) [DvD]
Marley and Me [DVD]
Scary Movie 4 (2006) [DvD]
Inkheart [DVD]
Hallettsville [DVD]
American High School [DVD]
Scar 3D [DVD]
Winged Creatures [DVD]
Happily Never After 2 [DVD]
Growing Out [DVD]
Bad Biology [DVD]
Virus Undead [DVD]
The Adventures of Food Boy [DVD]
Blood Scarab [DVD]
Far Cry [DVD]
Claim [DVD]
Watchmen [TS]
What Doesn’t Kill You [DVDSCR]
The Burrowers [DVDSCR]
Girl’s Best Friend [DVD]
New In Town [R5]
Trapped In 5150 [DVD]
Twilight [DVD]
Babysitter Wanted [DVD]
Walled In [DVD]
Tuesday [DVD]
The Unborn [R5]
Street Fighter Legend of Chun Li [CAM]
Becoming Jane (2007) [DvD]
The Devils Mercy [DVD]
The Legend Trip [DVD]
Let The Right One In [DVD]
Synecdoche New York [DVD]
Milk [DVD]
Bedtime Stories [SCR]
Stiletto [DVD]
The Devil Wears Prada (2006) [DvD]
The Last Confession Of Alexander Pearce [DVD]
Red Victoria [DVD]
Valkyrie [R5]
Lullaby [DVD]
Role Models [DVD]
Punisher War Zone [DVD]
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January 16, 2010

Star Trek: Insurrection

Star Trek: Insurrection
Star Trek: Insurrection (1998)

IMDB rating: 6.40

Plot: Engage! Captain Jean-Luc Picard and his Next Generation crew are back. From the beginning of the Federation, the Prime Directive was clear: no Starfleet expedition may interfere with the natural development of other civilizations. But now Picard is confronted with orders that undermine that decree. If he obeys, 600 peaceful residents of Ba’ku will be forcibly removed from their remarkable world, all for the reportedly greater good of millions who will benefit from the Ba’ku’s Fountain of Youth-like powers. If he disobeys, he will risk his Starship, his career, his life. But for Picard, there’s really only one choice. He must rebel against Starfleet . . . and lead the insurrection to preserve Paradise.

download Star Trek: Insurrection

Directors:

Actors: Stewart Patrick,Spiner Brent,Burton LeVar,Dorn Michael,Abraham F. Murray,Zerbe Anthony,Henry Gregg,Kelly Daniel Hugh,Welch Michael,Deakins Mark,Action,Adventure,Sci-Fi,Thriller,

Where can you download Star trek Insurrection?


Download or Stream all star trek episodes here, http://z13.invisionfree.com/Deep_Space_N ine/index.php

You can also download 550 Star Trek books here in .txt format, and Star Trek PC games as well.

ravensflock42 | Dec 26, 2009

Steal the Sky

Steal the Sky
Steal the Sky (1988)

IMDB rating: 5.90

Plot: This made-for-cable espionage melodrama centers on a beautiful Israeli spy who is assigned to use her wiles to convince an Iraqui flyer to defect and bring with him a valuable Soviet fighter plane.

Directors: Hancock John D.

Actors: Cross Ben,Gabai Sasson,Surovy Nicolas,Guttman Ronald,Rolston Mark,Gray Sam,Katsulas Andreas,Shillo Michael,Shiloach Joseph,Bar-Yotam Reuven,Saadi Faim,Action,Romance,War,

If jet aircraft have always made artificial clouds, how come no one calls them cloud machines?
Being in my 50s and having had an interest in aviation since my youth, I’ve been observing jets in the sky for many years. In 1999, I first noticed a jet whose condensation trail did NOT dissipate. I figured the jet was having trouble and didn’t give it much thought. Within the next 2 years, there would be days when 90% of jet traffic left non-dissipating trails and other days when jets only produced a normal, quickly dissipating contrail. In 2003, my job took me to China for 5 years. During my years in China, I did not witness any evidence of jet aircraft leaving trails in the sky. The sky either had naturally occurring clouds or was a brilliant blue. Don’t think that China doesn’t have many jets either….during the day I could usually count 3-6 in the sky at any given time. (Being a bridge engineer allows me much time outside)

Now I’ve returned to the USA and am living in Coachella Valley (Southern CA). This once sunny area with 350+ days per year of perfect blue skies is shrouded by artificial clouds at least 50% of the time. On the clear days, there are few jets and none leave a persistent trail. On the cloudy days, there are 10X as many jet aircraft with most of those leaving trails in the sky which usually turn into high cirrus clouds or a haze.

I’m simply outraged that the locals and tourists alike are not up in arms over having our blue skies stolen away.

But remember folks, don’t believe your own eyes…..believe what big brother tells us is the truth.


Contrails, as it is called, happen for all kind of intern combustion engines, even piston engines, if high and cold enough.

Air is taken into the engine and compressed (all engines flying at high altitudes are turbo-engines) the mixed with the fuel who’s combustion leaves traces of water, that is then released in the atmosphere behind the aircraft. The actual release of the exhaust is what cools it down by the same adiabatic effect of a lesser pressure that creates clouds, and turns it into tiny ice crystal. At that stage, they are very similar to the cirrus clouds found at the top of our troposphere.

Why do some remain for a long time while others dissipate quickly? It is under the same principle that rules the clouds. Just like water evaporates in the air, even under freezing point (it is then called sublimation) clouds evaporate in the air.

Contrails are then subject to the same as clouds. What we often forget is that, in the atmosphere, the air goes as much up and down as right or left. It is only on the ground that the wind is only felt as parallel to the ground. I know that from flying a light aircraft.

A cloud that remains at the same altitude is a cloud that slowly dissipate by the thermodynamic law of entropy and evaporates.

A cloud that rises remains at the same size or increase in size by the adiabatic effect of a lesser pressure and condensation above dew point temperature.

A cloud that sinks evaporates very fast from the warming of the adiabatic effect of a greater pressure.

And that’s why contrails may sustain or disappear, according to the winds aloft. If they appear in layers of wind shear, they may even take entirely different aspects and, after a while, be difficult to differentiate with "normal" cirrus clouds.

Michel Verheughe | Dec 28, 2009


There called contrails, and they arent polluting the earth, your car probably creates more pollution than they do. Got news for you- if you dont like the smog in CA- move, theres much better places.
allukcatsbaby | Dec 28, 2009


The contrails from the jets have always been there. You just started noticing them, so it seems like they’re a lot more prevalent. The trail is due to the rapid decompression of moist air behind a jet’s wings at high altitude. A slight increase in the occurrence of contrails could be due to improvements in aerodynamic designs of the wings, which causes the decompression at the backs of the wings. But, I’ve been living in Southern California for almost 50 years, and I haven’t seen an increase in jet contrails throughout that time.

The notion that this is some kind of government plot to spray pollutants or other chemicals into the atmosphere is a ridiculous conspiracy theory that has absolutely no basis in fact. If it makes you feel better, you can go get some tin foil to line your hat. That way you won’t be subject to the thought control waves that are actually being broadcast from cell phone towers.
Paul in San Diego | Dec 28, 2009

January 6, 2010

G-Force

G-Force
G-Force (2009)

IMDB rating: 4.30

Plot: The story is about a team of trained secret agent guinea pigs that takes on a mission for the US government. A specially trained squad of guinea pigs is dispatched to stop a diabolical billionaire, who plans to taking over the world with household appliances.

Directors: Yeatman Hoyt

Actors: Arnett Will,Bearden Tim,Brewer Shane,Buscemi Steve,Cage Nicolas,Casseus Gabriel,Davis Travis,De Paul Vincent,Ellis Chris,Favreau Jon,Fisher Michael J.,Galifianakis Zach,Huang James,Jones Tyler Patrick,Joyner Paul,Action,Adventure,Fantasy,

Will there be a g-force 2? (the movie)?
Well i love the film and i was wondering if there was guna be a new to come out soon?

And FYI i realy dont care if you think its a babies film because your wrong


I’m not certain. Given that the Domestic Gross was about $119 million & production budget was $150 million (not counting marketing) it wasn’t a HUGE money maker (it should have made money though given overseas gross made a tad bit more than domestic gross).

Toxic Panduh | Dec 30, 2009


Not planned at this time.
earth_angelus | Dec 30, 2009

January 5, 2010

Austin Powers in Goldmember

Austin Powers in Goldmember
Austin Powers in Goldmember (2002)

IMDB rating: 6.20

Plot: He’s found his mojo, baby, and now Austin Powers (Mike Myers) is back again in this shagadelic comedy-adventure! The “sshhh!” hits the fan when Dr. Evil and Mini-Me escape from prison. Joining forces with the superfreaky Goldmember, they kidnap Austin’s father, master spy Nigel Powers (Michael Caine), in a dastardly time-travel scheme to take over the world. Before you can say “Shake Your Booty,” Austin cruises to 1975 and teams up with sexy Foxxy Cleopatra (Beyonce Knowles) to stop Dr. Evil and Goldmember from their mischievous mayhem. With Michael York, Robert Wagner, Seth Green, Mindy Sterling and Verne J. Troyer.

Directors: Roach Jay

Actors: Myers Mike,Green Seth,York Michael,Wagner Robert,Troyer Verne,Caine Michael,Savage Fred,Matsuhisa Nobu,Himelstein Aaron,Zuckerman Josh,Adams Eddie,Action,Adventure,Comedy,Music,

Which Austin Powers movie was the best?
1. Austin Powers International man of mystery

2. Austin Powers The spy who Shagged me

3. Austin Powers in Goldmember


1. Austin Powers International man of mystery

"Signed by Mr. Powers"

| Aug 16, 2009


3.
Colin | Aug 16, 2009


Part one though I must admit I loved the third one….
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January 2, 2010

Ransom

Ransom
Ransom (1996)

IMDB rating: 6.50

Plot: Tom Mullen, rich airline owner, is shocked when his son is kidnapped. He is willing to pay the two million dollar ransom, but the drop goes wrong. So Tom turns the ransom money into a bounty on the head of the kidnapper.

i download here Ransom cheap

Directors: Howard Ron

Actors: Gibson Mel,Nolte Brawley,Sinise Gary,Lindo Delroy,Schreiber Liev,Wahlberg Donnie,Handler Evan,Gaston Michael,McCready Kevin Neil,Guilfoyle Paul,Bernstein Allen,Zuniga Jose,Action,Crime,Drama,Thriller,

Jehovah's Witnesses, what is meant by the statement of "a corresponding ransom"?
Only the death of another perfect man could pay the wages of sin. Jesus was such a man. Indeed, Jesus was "a corresponding ransom" for the saving of all redeemable mankind descended from Adam. If indeed a corresponding ransom, who is this ransom paid too? Or was it paid in full upon Jesus’ death?
John 19:
28Later, knowing that all was now completed, and so that the Scripture would be fulfilled, Jesus said, "I am thirsty." 29A jar of wine vinegar was there, so they soaked a sponge in it, put the sponge on a stalk of the hyssop plant, and lifted it to Jesus’ lips. 30When he had received the drink, Jesus said, "It is finished." With that, he bowed his head and gave up his spirit.

"It is finished" Does that mean the sin debt, the wages is paid in full?


1 John 5: 11-12
God has given us eternal life, and this life is in his Son. He who has the Son has life; he who does not have the Son of God does not have life.

1 John 2: 22-23
Who is the liar? It is the man who denies that Jesus is the Christ. Such a man is the antichrist

January 1, 2010

Break

Break
Break (2009)

IMDB rating: 6.90

Plot: A terminally ill crime boss, known only as The Man, hires a hit man named Frank to carry out his own assassination as well as the assassination of The Woman he loves. When The Woman turns out to be Frank’s long lost lover, he turns against The Man becoming the target himself.

Directors: Clebanoff Marc

Actors: Krueger Frank,Everett Chad,Madsen Michael,Durning Charles,Jones Matthew,Russo James,Wuku Xin Sarith,Carradine David,Hertford Whit,Palanca Luca,Del Vecchio Ken,Huang Jack,Action,Crime,Drama,

Should I forgive him?
I have been best mates with this guy for nearly a year. All that time he has had a huge crush on me but recently I have liked him too. I told him and we decided to give it a go. But after we met up again he broke up with me, I asked him why and he gave me three different stories. I asked him for the truth and he said he felt sorry for me and that’s why we dated. So I got annoyed and he rang me up later saying he did love me he is just scared and he doesn’t only just like me but he wants to give us another go but I don’t know if I can even talk to him again. He knows i’ve been hurt alot and he’s just messing me around. All he says is I’m sorry I love you really I’m just scared. Help me :( xxx


you should forgive him ones (only ones) and test him bit by bit sometimes you should keep a watch at him and if next time he does like this just never talk to him again in your life remember that plz.
Vida | Dec 12, 2009

December 31, 2009

The Time Machine

The Time Machine
The Time Machine (2002)

IMDB rating: 5.60

Plot: Based on the classic sci-fi novel by H.G. Wells, scientist and inventor, Alexander Hartdegen, is determined to prove that time travel is possible. His determination is turned to desperation by a personal tragedy that now drives him to want to change the past. Testing his theories with a time machine of his own invention, Hartdegen is hurtled 800,000 years into the future, where he discovers that mankind has divided into the hunter - and the hunted.

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Directors: Wells Simon

Actors: Pearce Guy,Addy Mark,Young Alan,Mumba Omero,Arias Yancey,Jones Orlando,Irons Jeremy,Stamberg Josh,Momrow John W.,Baker Max,Meyer Jeffrey M.,Sci-Fi,Adventure,Action,

Cash machines in Bangkok?
Are there cash machines in Bangkok?
How much do they charge to use the cash machine?
Do the cash machines allow withdrawals from a VISA card or MAESTRO card?

What banks are there in Bangkok?

Thank you again.
Yes I mean ATM Machine. Thank you.


Cash Machines? Do you mean ATM machines. Yes they are all over Thailand, Doesn’t matter what bank ATM machine you use it all the same. Remember you will be charged by the Thai bank 150 baht each time you withdraw Thai baht, so I recommend you take the max amount which is 20,000 baht each time to get the most of your money. Also keep in mind that your bank may charge from 0 to 3% international fee when you do use your card here. Check with you Bank, and also inform them that you will be traveling overseas so they don’t lock your account when you do try to make a withdrawal here. There are just too many Thai banks for me to list so here a few of the major ones, Bangkok Bang, Krung Thai Bank, Siam City Bank, Thai Military Bank, and the list go on and on. As I said it doesn’t matter which bank ATM you use it all the same.
No | Dec 27, 2009


If you mean ATM’s - yes there are lots of them all over the big cities. There are ATM’s at the airport too! I have had no problems with Visa and MasterCard debit cards. With my cards I must have a 4 digit pin number. I think many ATM’s will take Maestro but there will be a few that will not. No big problem there are lots of ATMs around anyway.
http://www.thaivisa.com/forum/Atm-Maestr o-Debit-Card-t240815.html

Like the other post said there is a 150 baht surcharge for every withdrawal. You can also bring travelers checks if you want. The rate is favorable and the fee to cash a travelers check is only 33 baht. So, for the same amount of money a TC is a little cheaper for awhile. Some banks and lots of credit unions will issue travelers checks without any commission if you are one one of their account holders. Some credit unions also pay for some of your ATM charges or at least a minimum amount of charges. If you bring cash bring the largest bills you can get. This way you have less bulk. Bring newer bills in good condition. Wait until you get to Thailand for your best rate.

List of Banks:
http://www.inntron.co.th/bank_thc.html

Keep in mind that the rate of exchange you get changes a little every working day. These changes, either up or down, are not too drastic. Most of the banks will have about the same rate give or take a few satang. You will have to change some money over at the airport because taxi cabs and most businesses only take Thai money.

To lessen any chance of credit card fraud use cash for cheap purchases such as restaurants, street vendors and stores. I always have a credit card available for emergencies that might come up. (Remember to let your banks know you will be out of the country!)

Good luck.
karazyal | Dec 27, 2009

December 29, 2009

No Escape

No Escape
No Escape (1994)

IMDB rating: 5.60

Plot: The year is 2022, prison systems from all over the world are now run by private corporations and have become business. After being sentenced to life imprisonment for the murder of his commanding officer who ordered him to wipe out innocent people. Convicted soldier John Robbins is dumped on the prison island Absolom (after he refused to execute his cell-mate and assaulted the Warden). On Absolom, convicts are put there to either survive or die. Robbins finds the prison island is inhabited by two camps, The Outsiders, tribes of savage prisoners led by the evil Walter Merrick and The Insiders, a community of prisoners living in a fortified village “The Compound” led by The Father. Robbins finds escape from Absolom is impossible, surveillance satellites monitor Absolom and gunships prevent all convicts from escaping from the prison island and The Warden has secretly put a spy on Absolom. Caught up in a feud between the two camps, Robbins is determined to escape from the prison island and finds it is his ultimate challenge as nobody has ever escaped and he agrees to help The Insiders defend “The Compound” from The Outsiders.

Directors: Campbell Martin

Actors: Liotta Ray,Henriksen Lance,Wilson Stuart,Dillon Kevin,O’Connor Kevin J.,Henderson Don,McNeice Ian,Shepherd Jack,Lerner Michael,Hudson Ernie,Kiefel Russell,Logan Brian M.,Chan Cheuk-Fai,Colombani Machs,Argue David,Action,Drama,Sci-Fi,

Please critique or rate this poem?
(I know this one’s not for everyone, but I was inspired when I saw a Fra Angelico piece)

"Requiem"

His arms stretched as if to gather eternity
even as his feet were affixed to that moment
His hair hung low with the weight of his burden
even as his head drooped with dispair
A sigh escaped his parted lips.
It seems he thought he was forsaken again
his withered clothes lay at his feet
along with the cares of a world lamenting.
And as I beheld the multitude of thorns
driven deep, and finding their mark
that would cause streams of blood from each pore
for every tear he tried to withhold.
But I noticed, though his face was sombre
and almost eloquent in anguish
The one detail I could not surpass
was the expression in his eyes
Open, wide, and full; they seemed to embrace
They were dark, but not full of emptiness,
sorrowful, but not in finality
The beauty I beheld, radiated
and I saw in the depths of it, the depths of his love.
Dies ir?, dies illa; In paradisum deducant te Angeli
Requiem aeternam Domine; In paradisum deducant te Angeli


I had to stop half way through, to wipe this audible diarrhea from my ears and eyes. Their is an elephant at the local zoo who paints with water colors. You should contact him for some artistic pointers for your writing. Good day to you ma’am.
ManBearPig | Dec 14, 2009


I couldnt be bothered to read past the 3rd word, but then I dont like poetry.
D | Dec 14, 2009


Where I come from poetry is supposed to have a rhyme or rhythm to it. Yours simply doesn’t.
Master T | Dec 14, 2009


Beautiful description of Christ’s death. Wow. I literally just have to stop for a minute there. I don’t know the Latin (?) or what it means, but I found it very moving. I wonder, are you depicting a particular persons view, or is this just another face in the crowd?

Anyways, there were a few things I noticed. First: "His hair hung low with the weight of his burden/even as his head drooped with dispair." Despair is spelling wrong, just fyi. Also If his hair hangs low and his head drops, which are similar actions, I’m not sure the word even makes sense there. Besides, you just used that word in the previous line. Maybe change it to while, or something like that.

Second: Just a question, can clothes be withered? Maybe sullied or desecrated. To me withered is dry and knotted. An old withered tree, or my grandmother’s withered hands. The clothes would be more of a dirty, bloody, torn pile. I don’t know what the right word is, but I don’t think it’s withered.

Also, you abruptly change into passive voice for one line. "was the expression in his eyes." It felt like I took an abrupt U-turn. The rest of the poem is in active voice. Fix it.

I think you need a period at the end of "Open, wide, and full; they seemed to embrace" and maybe a colon or semicolon after "was the expression in his eyes"

Take a general look at your punctuation, figure out how you want to poem to be read.

I understand what this means: "And as I beheld the multitude of thorns/driven deep, and finding their mark/that would cause streams of blood from each pore/for every tear he tried to withhold."

But, it’s not particularly clear. I think you have some agreement issues. Write that whole mess out as a sentence, and reword it so that you don’t have any misplaced modifiers.

Again, beautiful. But, its a work in progress. Keep at it.
TV | Dec 14, 2009


it needs alot of work…on a scale of 1-10 I give it a 3 for trying
Snow The Man | Dec 14, 2009


thats deep i like it
LA N1gga | Dec 14, 2009

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